Short story , please review?

I'll be honest, I only read the first three paragraphs, but they need work and I therefore ume that the rest of it does as well. For starters, you cannot use that many exclamation points at the end of one sentence. This is a story, not an e-mail to a friend. The first sentence of your second paragraph makes no sense whatsoever. He "reported the offices to of The Daily Wire"?? Gentlemen should not be capitalized, and overall your sentences are just confusing. You should try rewording.